Brusque eyebrows gesticulate disaffection
shrugged from a deadpan demeanour,
bristling with iron-filing stubble.
Belated cheap aftershave smells defeat
loitering smoke-like, bitter inhalations
for poorly timed passers by.
Shabbily suited, shoes scuffed,
giving the impression he’d been dragged
unconscious into place. At his post
to cast a disparaging eye over the public.
And yet, amid this flotsam and jetsam
of a man, one thing demands respect.
Pinned to a creased lapel, it gleams
under the fluorescents, reflecting
self-importance like a lighthouse beam.
Worn as a medal of honour,
with all the pomp and ceremony
of a war veteran. Worthless to all but him,
Brian it reads, emblazoned boldly across
the plastic, at the top it says Security.















Comments
I like it. always always surprising to see what you write about. I honestly didn't know it was going to end like that. I thought it was more about a homeless man
goes to show ya, I know nothing
(You've got the emoticon virus I see!)
Is it catching d'ya think?
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"Comment, to get comments.
Share your kindness, not your hate.
Love the art, before yourself"
must........resist.....
GAH!
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laugh while you can
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"Comment, to get comments.
Share your kindness, not your hate.
Love the art, before yourself"
I think that's mostly what I need to learn. The sense that the poem is as it should be, not one of many possible variations.
I know I've been pretty inactive lately, but I'll send you the new and improved version of that Paris poem soon.
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Hedwig
--As cool as a fruitstand in New York and maybe as strange--
Looking forward to reading you.
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"Comment, to get comments.
Share your kindness, not your hate.
Love the art, before yourself"
giving the impression he’d been dragged
unconscious into place.
yes.
as usual, i don't have much to critique here.
love the concept.
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